登陆注册
5115500000011

第11章 段落写作(The Paragraph)(5)

On Sunday I went to a bookstore. There are many people there. Some were young and some were old, some were women some were men. I picked one book from the shelf and began to read. I found it was very interesting, so I decided to buy it. It was about a famous foreign politician who I admire in my heart. He had been in prison for many years, but later he was released because many people supported him. Now he becomes a famous man in the world. But when I felt in my pocket, I found my money was missing. I had to put it back. I felt very miserable, really miserable.

二、描写法(Development by Description)

描写通常按空间或时间顺序来进行。

1. 空间顺序(Space order)

常用词:where (ever), behind, before, under, in, out, over, above, within, outside, around, upon, in front, in back, to the left, to the right, at the top, at the bottom, to the north (south, east, etc), up, down, through

范文:

As I entered Professor Walta"s office, I could see that it is a reflection of his brisk, efficient personality. On the left wall, bookcases from floor to ceiling contain neat rows of books arranged in order by their subject. Directly ahead, two windows look out over the quad, their shades drawn precisely level, their curtains ted neatly back on either side. Centered on the wall on both sides of the windows are prints of Greek statues. In front of the windows are two modernistic chairs of chrome and vinyl, looking as though they have never been occupied, their backs reflecting the glare from the windows. On the right is Professor Walta"s desk, on which are neatly places a pipe-holder, a black vase with a single red rose, and, in the center of the desk, a square notebook that lies open as if waiting to record every breath taken in that room.

2. 时间顺序(Time order)

常用词:first, second, finally, at last, before, after, now, yesterday, tomorrow, the day before yesterday, the day after tomorrow, soon, later, afterwards, quarter, hour , day, week, month, year, decade, century, dawn, morning, noon, afternoon, dusk, night, midnight, life, time

范文:

Autumn may be considered to begin with the month of September and to end in November. In its early part, the weather is very warm and pleasant, but later on it becomes colder and the nights longer. People think this period is the most enjoyable time in the year, and prefers to have their holidays. Crops and fruittrees are now ripe; the fields are waving with yellow corn; and the trees and hedges change their color form a bright green to a muddy brown. In the middle of the season, the country presents a lively picture with the harvesting. It is the time for us to gather the fruits of our labor. Towards the end of the season, there is a touch of romance in the glorious hues of falling leaves. The trees begin to lose their foliage, and the branches gradually become bare. The ground is strewed with withered leaves.

病例分析:

(1)描写没有一定的顺序性。

Our campus is very beautiful. There are three teaching buildings. They are red brick buildings. We have our classes there. We also have a library. It is said to be built in 1979. There are many books in it, so we students often read books and magazines there. And our gate was a new gate, and I think it is very beautiful. Our dormitories are beautiful too, we also have a playground, we often play there to make our body stronger.

(2)主观评价多于客观描写。

My English teacher in high school was loved by all of us. We admired him because he was so handsome; we loved him because he was so responsible; we liked him because he was very gentle to us. He also taught us with different kinds of methods. Sometimes he would sing an English song in class. Because of him, we were all interested in English.

三、例证法(Development by Illustration)

例证经常用到的过渡词有:for example, for instance, that is, to illustrate, such as , like, as.

范文:

Home is where I can find similar ways of life. When I go shopping I can find clothes that Chinese people wear. I can buy things that are related to my culture. At home, I can speak my own language. I can express myself better. Communicating with others in my own language, gives me a sense of closeness. This is also true when I listen to Chinese songs on the radio. Sometimes the songs move me. When I turn on the television set, I can see familiar faces--black hair and dark eyes. I can see people of my own origin--in culture and in nationality. The movies reflect the real life of Chinese people and I enjoy watching them.

English grammar is just one of many things you know subconsciously far better than you know consciously. When you walk up a flight of stairs, for example, you can do so without having to think about how to do it. You can climb stairs while carrying on a conversation, while composing a love sonnet, even while walking in your sleep. Although many hundreds of muscles are finely coordinated in the task of climbing stairs, you perform it effortlessly and even gracefully, and without any apparent mental effort. Yet if you or I were asked to describe how we climb stairs we would do it very inaccurately at best: “Let"s see,” we might say. “First you bring the right leg up and bend the knee. You point the toe up, shift your weight forward, and bring the sole down on the next step. Then ...” Of course you would not have begun to describe which muscles you use when you bend the knee. Your description is a long way from capturing the directions your brain gives to your body as you move. The fact is that unless you are a highly trained physiologist, you do not “know” much about how you climb stairs. And yet in another sense you “know” how to do it quite well, since you do it all the time. Your conscious knowledge of the task cannot come close to matching what you know subconsciously.

--Richard Velt, Discovering English Grammar

运用例证法往往会犯两种错误:第一是举例不当,第二是例子没有主次顺序。

病例分析:

Population control is a fundamental policy in China. If the country is overcrowded too much, the government has to spend more money than they can afford to support them; Overcrowded, the country may seek more land to support its people, therefore it may want to have a war against other country....

再看另外一个例子:

同类推荐
  • 修身立世的故事(中华典故故事全集)

    修身立世的故事(中华典故故事全集)

    本套《中华典故故事全集》全部精选我国著名典故故事,并根据具体思想内涵进行相应归类,主要包括《爱国为民的故事》、《军事战争的故事》、《修身立世的故事》、《智慧谋略的故事》、《读书学习的故事》、《品质修养的故事》、《社会世情的故事》、《世事明察的故事》、《心灵情感的故事》和《悟道明理的故事》等十册,书中每个典故都包括诠释、出处和故事等内容,简单明了,短小精悍,具有很强的启迪性、智慧性和内涵性,非常适合青少年用于话题作文的论据,也对青少年的人生成长以及知识增长具有重要的作用,是青少年阅读和收藏的良好版本。
  • 人员培训与开发

    人员培训与开发

    本书共分为11章,主要内容包括:人员培训与开发概述、战略性人员培训与开发、培训需求分析、培训的组织与实施、培训效果评估与培训效果转化等。
  • 心灵体操自助训练(培养学生心灵成长的经典故事)

    心灵体操自助训练(培养学生心灵成长的经典故事)

    在这套丛书里,我们针对青少年的心理特点,专门选择了一些特殊的故事,分别对他们在这一时期将会遭遇的情感问题、生活问题、学习问题、交友问题以及各种心理健康问题,从心理学的角度进行剖析和讲解,并提出了解决问题的方法和措施,以供同学们参考借鉴。
  • 青少年最想知道的100个著名人物

    青少年最想知道的100个著名人物

    从佛祖在菩提树下人生的意义,到达尔文用毕生心血造就进化论,区别人猿;从呼唤知识的第一人培根,到现代哲学之父笛卡儿;从边走边唱的盲人诗人荷马,到倾倒东西方的爱国诗人泰戈尔……人类的精英们总是走在探索与追求的奋争前沿,他们是全人类的脊梁,是最顶级的精英人物。
  • 雾都孤儿(语文新课标课外读物)

    雾都孤儿(语文新课标课外读物)

    现代中、小学生不能只局限于校园和课本,应该广开视野,广长见识,广泛了解博大的世界和社会,不断增加丰富的现代社会知识和世界信息,才有所精神准备,才能迅速地长大,将来才能够自由地翱翔于世界蓝天。否则,我们将永远是妈妈怀抱中的乖宝宝,将永远是温室里面的豆芽菜,那么,我们将怎样走向社会、走向世界呢?
热门推荐
  • 灵爆九天

    灵爆九天

    【起点正版】这里是只属于灵气的世界,没有花俏艳丽的魔法,有的,仅仅是繁衍到巅峰的灵气!新书等级制度:灵者,灵师,大灵师,灵王,灵皇,灵宗,灵尊,灵圣,灵帝。灵之极!爆九天!新书恳求收藏,恳求推荐,谢谢大家!O(∩_∩)O
  • 红粉楼

    红粉楼

    本书为公版书,为不受著作权法限制的作家、艺术家及其它人士发布的作品,供广大读者阅读交流。
  • 昔日重现

    昔日重现

    在这套《中外名家精品荟萃》中,包罗了近百年来中外广泛流传的名家名作。它们的作者大都是在历史上享有崇高地位,曾经影响过文坛的大师、巨匠、泰斗。这些作品经受住了时间的考验和历史的洗礼,作者的思想高度和精神内涵在岁月中不断沉淀,最终成为最美丽的琥珀。本书为其中之一的《昔日重现》分册,所选的文章都具有很强的故事性和可读性,展现了名家们的经典构思。
  • tfboys与易梦千缘

    tfboys与易梦千缘

    两年前,因为一场车祸,她被迫离开了自己的国家,独自一人。在国外的期间,却总是有着几个相同的梦境相打扰。回国后却被认错人,然而两人殊不知,阴谋都是在她回国后而升起的。失忆,失散,就连自己喜欢的人也在伤害着自己,她又该怎么做才好呢?
  • TFBOYS听见下雨的声音

    TFBOYS听见下雨的声音

    我听见下雨的声音,在未来响起;那些年我们在雨中的点点滴滴,是否还回的去?友情的背叛,换来的是什么?恋人的伤害,剩下的又是什么?我在雨中看着被淋湿的摩天轮,想起你的脸,浪漫的传说,终究是深深的伤害……
  • 都市尖兵

    都市尖兵

    他是华夏最神秘特种部队有史以来最年轻的指挥官,是华夏上头警卫局最顶尖的教官兼保镖,一次莫名其妙的婚约任务使他重回都市,伴随而来的是无数的美女和麻烦,当祖国需要时他总是能挺身而出,他用他超人的智慧和身手书写着属于他自己的都市传奇。
  • 从地狱归来的魔人之祖

    从地狱归来的魔人之祖

    穿越者,轮回者,天命者。此三者并称为多元宇宙三大毒瘤,他们出淤泥而不染,不服权贵、不惧刀兵,有伟大的人生理想抱负。霸气四溢、虎躯一震即可使敌人望风而降、美女贴服胯下,不需要科学依据。当他已得到天下,就敲诈剥夺天下人的骨髓,离散天下人的子女,以供奉自己一人的荒淫享乐,把这视作理所当然,说:“这些都是我的产业的利息呀。”既然这样,所谓的主角便是天下最大的祸害。杀穿越者以保家,杀轮回者以卫国,杀天命者守护世界和平。读者群:214990773
  • 提拉米苏之诺言

    提拉米苏之诺言

    樱花下的誓言不散的爱,你说过的话是否还记得?一切是谎言还是真实?多年后你成为明星,而我则是一所大学的老师我们的关系是否还会像从前一样?再次相见是回避还是坦然接受?
  • 死神让你别出声

    死神让你别出声

    死亡的气味,让人如此胆寒心惊。当人们试图揭示死亡的奥秘时,引来的却是无尽的报复和伤害……他再次出现在校园里,但眼神已经和过去那个放着光彩的少年不一样了。他竟然把一个追求多年无果的女同学趁夜绑到了学校后面的花园里,并侮辱了她。接下来的几天,他相继用一条粗绳子,把几位曾经刻薄的对待他的老师,勒死在学校的图书馆里。
  • 苦修神位

    苦修神位

    身为被一流世家抛弃的废物凌天新,意外获得八色神雷传承,获得一身绝世传承,纵横地球。